The little picture of Shadow came from someone else, but the poem is original. What do you think? I was trying to make it sound like something Shadow himself might write.
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Lonely Tortured Soul
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The little picture of Shadow came from someone else, but the poem is original. What do you think? I was trying to make it sound like something Shadow himself might write.
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you're very talented when it comes to this sorta thing rose. :)
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Thanks. :)
Anyone else have a comment?
Anyone else have a comment?
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The poem doesn't accurately describe Shadow's situation in my opinion. The image is nicely done, though, but with the addition of fan clothes, it gives you a sense of fakeness.
"Hmph! Faker!" -- Shadow The Hedgehog
Anyways, it's pretty nice all in all.
"Hmph! Faker!" -- Shadow The Hedgehog
Anyways, it's pretty nice all in all.
Shadowsgirl
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I wasn't trying to describe his situation. I was trying to describe what he might be feeling inside.
As for the pic, I wanted one that kinda looked forlorn and desolate. I was going to go with another, that was a picture of Shadow traveling. But I desided not to because he was shading his eyes from the harsh sunlight. The poem doesn't really lend itself to a sunny day scene.
As for the pic, I wanted one that kinda looked forlorn and desolate. I was going to go with another, that was a picture of Shadow traveling. But I desided not to because he was shading his eyes from the harsh sunlight. The poem doesn't really lend itself to a sunny day scene.
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Okay, I can go with that. But, what is he feeling inside about? Maria? What is the poem describing? ..Besides the Plain pain....
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Seriously. No one needs to see that.
Seriously. No one needs to see that.
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Oh, come on, it was just a sarcastic crying face, I didn't post anything inappropriate.
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Roterblitz wrote:Oh, come on, it was just a sarcastic crying face, I didn't post anything inappropriate.
I know, but that was repulsive.
Shadowsgirl
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Everything in general that he's had to deal with. His lot in life, basically.Zezima wrote:Okay, I can go with that. But, what is he feeling inside about? Maria? What is the poem describing? ..Besides the Plain pain....
NeoMetalSonic
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Hmmm yep sounds like Emo Shadow
UltimateHyperSuperSonic
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Very nice... I can really relate Shadow...
Shadowsgirl
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That's only one verse of the poem. I wrote more to it. Wanna see?
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Shadowsgirl wrote:That's only one verse of the poem. I wrote more to it. Wanna see?
Definitely, it is a great poem so far, and I can really see Shadow saying something like that. Awesome job
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Okay. Here's the rest. I've also got it up on Hedgehog's Haven.
Where I walk, trouble follows me
A dark cloud filling the sky
I’ve no umbrella to keep off the rain
Where I walk, Chaos pursues me
A flood of turmoil sweeping over the land
So much is beyond my Control
Out into the darkness, again and again I call
And yet no one can hear the cry
Of my lonely tortured soul
Where I look, I am alone
The only one for miles around
So small in the emptyness…
Where I listen, I hear quiet
No sound but my beating heart
So loud in the silence…
Out into the darkness, I scream and cry and plead
And yet unanswered go the calls
Of my lonely tortured soul
So long ago, on that sad day
When much was lost forever
Helpless I was to stop it
So long ago, few now remember
The lives that were snuffed out
And I could only watch them die
Out into the darkness, in protest I cry out
Yet those who hear would silence the shouts
Of my lonely tortured soul
Through struggles I have suffered
A life at times barely worth living
Filled with pain beyond compare
Through trials I have endured
An anguish like no other
None deserve this kind of pain
Out into the darkness, for a ray of light I search
And someone who can heal the wounds
Of my lonely tortured soul
Lonely Tortured Soul
Where I walk, trouble follows me
A dark cloud filling the sky
I’ve no umbrella to keep off the rain
Where I walk, Chaos pursues me
A flood of turmoil sweeping over the land
So much is beyond my Control
Out into the darkness, again and again I call
And yet no one can hear the cry
Of my lonely tortured soul
Where I look, I am alone
The only one for miles around
So small in the emptyness…
Where I listen, I hear quiet
No sound but my beating heart
So loud in the silence…
Out into the darkness, I scream and cry and plead
And yet unanswered go the calls
Of my lonely tortured soul
So long ago, on that sad day
When much was lost forever
Helpless I was to stop it
So long ago, few now remember
The lives that were snuffed out
And I could only watch them die
Out into the darkness, in protest I cry out
Yet those who hear would silence the shouts
Of my lonely tortured soul
Through struggles I have suffered
A life at times barely worth living
Filled with pain beyond compare
Through trials I have endured
An anguish like no other
None deserve this kind of pain
Out into the darkness, for a ray of light I search
And someone who can heal the wounds
Of my lonely tortured soul
–Shadow T. Hedgehog
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:O: Awesome, I can actually appreciate that poem, and I am not a poem lover by any means.
Shadowsgirl
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Thanks.
UltimateHyperSuperSonic
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Holy crow... That's awesome!
Shadowsgirl
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Glad you like it.
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Good. Good.
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Excellent work, Shadowsgirl. Have you made any more?
Shadowsgirl
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No, but I'm working on it.
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I wrote another one, this was just a quick one. Inspited by a storm at my place right now. I can hear the thunder as I type this.
Lightning crash and Thunder roar
A storm is born around me
Turn my back to the wind
It’s lost and lonely wail
Nature’s rage and the Elements’ fury
No shelter for me to take
Must endure and withstand
The raw and untamed power
Rain and Ice, Sleet and Snow
Comes and buries me
Fill the bleak and empty night
Abandoned by the sun itself
Wind stills and Dawn breaks
Warm sunlight shines upon me
Another night survived
Still alone….
Storm
Lightning crash and Thunder roar
A storm is born around me
Turn my back to the wind
It’s lost and lonely wail
Nature’s rage and the Elements’ fury
No shelter for me to take
Must endure and withstand
The raw and untamed power
Rain and Ice, Sleet and Snow
Comes and buries me
Fill the bleak and empty night
Abandoned by the sun itself
Wind stills and Dawn breaks
Warm sunlight shines upon me
Another night survived
Still alone….
–Shadow T. Hedgehog
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